Musical and suggestive. Sometimes I feel your poetry is quite hermetic. I miss a little more context, and I think it could be useful in a community of writers. But the most important issue is how those poems makes you feel, if you are satisfied reading them.
Thanks for the feedback (and sorry for the slow reply, I've been travelling) - I don't know if I write poetry that I intend to be entirely contextualised or personal, I'd like it to be interpretable in whatever way by people reading it; perhaps the issue here is that I don't offer enough of a way in in the poems themselves?
Both poems are pretty tight, definitely worth sharing imho. the second has an evocative edge I like, seemingly mundane actions but then the work introduces these soft sounds, sighs, shuffles... There is something going on under the surface which i cannot put my finger on, but i like the softness of it.
Musical and suggestive. Sometimes I feel your poetry is quite hermetic. I miss a little more context, and I think it could be useful in a community of writers. But the most important issue is how those poems makes you feel, if you are satisfied reading them.
Thanks for the feedback (and sorry for the slow reply, I've been travelling) - I don't know if I write poetry that I intend to be entirely contextualised or personal, I'd like it to be interpretable in whatever way by people reading it; perhaps the issue here is that I don't offer enough of a way in in the poems themselves?
Both poems are pretty tight, definitely worth sharing imho. the second has an evocative edge I like, seemingly mundane actions but then the work introduces these soft sounds, sighs, shuffles... There is something going on under the surface which i cannot put my finger on, but i like the softness of it.
Thanks, Yann, I appreciate the feedback!